Vasuderatorrent's suggestion:
We the People of the United States, in order to form a better society, establish fairness under the law, insure peace among its citizens, provide for the national defense of our nation, promote a good life for all citizens, and secure liberty to ourselves and the future citizens, do establish this Constitution for the United States of America.
Bigfoot88's suggestion:
We the citizens of the sovereign States, in order to accomplish together what is more difficult apart, do authorize a consensual union of limited powers, codified by this Constitution of the United States of America.
Sangha's suggestion:
We the People of the United States, in order to form a better society, establish equal protection and application for everyone under the law, insure peace among its citizens, provide for the national defense and security of our nation, promote the prosperity, safety and health of its' citizens, and secure liberty to ourselves and the future citizens, do establish this Constitution for the United States of America.
My suggestion:
We the people, in order to ensure peaceful cooperation and commerce between the various sovereign states, provide the common defense, promote justice and the general welfare without prejudice or favoritism, and secure the unalienable rights and blessings of liberty for every citizen, do ordain and establish this Constitution of the United States of America.
Bigfoot88's suggestion gave me the idea of utilizing PirateMk88's suggestion re sovereignty, and I amended my original suggestion to say "the various
sovereign states". That gets us closer to where he was coming from without the Preamble sanctioning anarchy in any way.
I would gently object to both Vasuderatorrent's and Sangha's wording because both suggest that it is the federal government's responsibility to create the society we will have. It is that very concept I wish to get away from. The federal government's responsibility must be to secure our unalienable God given rights and then leave the people alone to form whatever sorts of societies they wish to have or the new Constitution will accomplish little to correct what is an overreaching authoritarian central government.